Website English Task - Alien Story

Why not type up your alien story and share it for us to enjoy?
Paste it into a comment below.
I look forward to having a read and making a comment on it.



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  1. AnonymousMarch 25, 2020 at 2:33 AM

    uh oh Jeremy the jolly alien has the corona virus. He is as hot as the sun and he feels sick.
    He cant go to school he has to stay at home with a mask on that nurses wear while doing operations,but the worst thing is he cant go near anybody!. he cant go to the shop either, play games he has to sit in BED! despite this, he still eats rockets, people anything he can find really

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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 25, 2020 at 4:16 AM

      Thank you for this. I like the simile you use 'as hot as the sun'. Can you add some speech that the character might say and remember to use speech marks?

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    2. AnonymousMarch 25, 2020 at 4:41 AM

      One afternoon, Alex looked through his brand new telescope , he didn’t believe what he was looking, he said “whatever could that be ?“
      Six months later he became an astronaut for nasa and he went to space and he saw the mysterious thing he slowly stepped up and he said “hi my name is Alex.” The creature turned around and there was a three eyed animal said “hi there I am called Sam but I am lost can you help me please “ Alex replied “yes but first do you want to visit my friends?”

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    3. AnonymousMarch 26, 2020 at 2:59 AM

      the one undrneaththis, about lilly was mine i forgot my name. Isabella

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  2. AnonymousMarch 25, 2020 at 3:24 AM

    One morning lilly woke up to see a dazling bright light.She went outside to see what it was ,a blue figure emerged from the light , it was scaly but he looked kind. "hi" he said "um ...hi" replied lilly. The two watched as a spaceship flew off leaving a trail of dust "nooo!" "they've left me." The spaceship flew off until it was out of sight. "you can stay here ,my mum won't mind!" exclaimed lilly "cool I've always wanted to learn how to ride a bike!" the alien told lillly. So the pair ran inside to get a bike which was blue just like the alien. As he sat on the bike lilly kindly showed him what to do "hold these" pointing to the handles. "and put your feet on these and go!" He nearly fell off but lilly helped him. It took a while to get it right but after a while he got it going which put a smile on his face. lilly ran in to get her bike "lets ride around town." "ok".

    the end









































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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 25, 2020 at 4:19 AM

      Thanks for this. You set the scene really well and good use of speech marks for characters talking. Can you re-write one of your sentences or write a new one and use brackets for exta information?

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  3. Harry MMarch 25, 2020 at 3:42 AM

    Cold and wet, Murf scowerd the land of England, looking for some sort of shelter. There were cars, buildings and people everywhere. He’d never seen such sights as of spending his entire life on Mars. “ Where is I” he thought, roaming the city in the darkest of night. The rain wasn’t helping either, making the ground wet and slippery.

    Morning fell upon the land, Murf still searching for a home fit for an alien like him. All of a sudden, a polite, old lady old lady came up to the young alien and asked “Hello, you look lost. Would you like to stay in my palace?” Murf then replied “Me would like that”. He followed the old lady to a wonderful building with a very grand entrance. The old lady helped the little alien out of the car.”My name is Queen Elizabeth if I haven’t already told you. What’s yours?” “Murf is name” he answered.

    The two walked into the palace and Liz handed Murf a small pile of money. “Use this to build yourself a rocket to see if you can get back to Mars”. Three years passed as Murf worked hard to get the rocket done. The moon was full, hopes were high as Murf got ready to say his last goodbyes. He set off fast and speedy, his rocket going so fast it could take over a cheater. Another week passed, Liz was in bed. Something was going wrong with her head. She got tested, it was serious. Some sort of creature or alien had passed on a disease. It was coronavirus...

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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 25, 2020 at 4:23 AM

      Thank you for this Harry. A great story. I like your use of commas. Can you write a couple of sentences of character description for Murf so I can picture him in my mind?

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    2. AnonymousMarch 26, 2020 at 3:07 AM

      cool story, has liz recoverd yet? did you prince charles got it too?

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  4. Holly :DMarch 25, 2020 at 4:21 AM

    hi mr pickering i know this isn’t the story but i wanted to say that science was really fun me and my brother did it again and again we loved it. 😀

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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 25, 2020 at 4:25 AM

      Hi Holly, I'm glad you enjoyed the science and hope it worked and you didn't get everywhere wet! Now how about that English story?!

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  5. AnonymousMarch 25, 2020 at 8:13 AM

    By Permy (Alex). Sorry I only managed a paragraph because I had to go to bed 🛌 yesterday ,hope u enjoy it!PS I wrote it in my book also science was fun but I used a whole cardboard box!!!🤣🤣🤣

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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 25, 2020 at 12:02 PM

      Thanks Alex. Thats a great start. Good use of speech marks. A little character description to help me picture the main character would just make it better. Well done on the science, im glad you enjoyed it too.

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  6. AnonymousMarch 26, 2020 at 4:15 AM

    Once upon a time in 2100, eighty years from now, in anplace called get'o'way, there were two friends called Josh and Elliot.They were best friends and one night, they went out to play in the woods for hide and seek but when it was Josh's turn to hide, he found a massive blue bubble and went to see what it was.Inside the bubble there was a little blue baby alien that was as blue as the ocean.We checked if we could go into the bubble,we closed our eyesand walked forward.When we opend our eyes we were inside the bubble!The aliens skin looked like a crab shell.When we felt him,he was as cold as ice,so we guessed he was from Uranus because its the coldest planet.We named him Frosty because he was freezing cold.The alien stood up and starded to speak some words,he said things like "Me no crash from space." and "I dont speak opposite." But when he said that we figured out he could only speak the opposite way round.So we spoke his language and he told us a lot of facts about him like a week for us is a year for him and he was split up from his parents when he crash landed and he wants to find them.So we took him home to do some research on aliens and it said that if they are alone when you find them, they need to find their mum and dad so they don't get hurt or damaged and they are protected if anyone mean trys to kill them.The next day,we went back to the woods and found a tracker thing with two dots on tthe screen so we went to the red dots and found Frosty's mum and dad and it was all happy.THE END. Josh

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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 26, 2020 at 2:09 PM

      Excellent effort Josh. Nice creative idea and i love the similes you use. Could you write a new sentence or amend one to make it start with an ly-ing?

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  7. AnonymousMarch 26, 2020 at 4:40 AM

    One day, a little green alien found some ragged old, broken space junk.
    It was floating in space (which looked like a bulging black hole).
    He quickly floated over to check it out, ‘WOAH’ said the alien.
    He gathered it all up and made a fantastic rocket.
    He would use the rocket to get to Mercury.
    As quick as a cheetah he got in the rocket, beep beep beep went the rusty buttons.
    Fiveeeee, fourrrrrr, threeeee, twoooo, oneeeeee, BLAST OFF.
    Finally the little alien had set off, ‘yayyyy’ he shrieked
    Not long after take off, he met an asteroid field, BANG, someone of something crashed into the rocket made of space junk.
    His left boost was losing power, he needed to think fast!
    What would he do?

    Oliver H

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    1. Ben PickeringMarch 26, 2020 at 2:12 PM

      Thanks Oliver. I love the cliffhanger at the end, but I'm not going to be able to sleep tonight thinking about what happened to this poor little green alien? Could you write a couple more sentences and let me know if he's ok and try to include a connective like however or because?

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  8. AnonymousApril 23, 2020 at 12:41 AM

    Once upon a time on a planet called C-53 (earth) was a battle between the kree and skrill
    they were not from here,they were from a planet far far away. Carol Danverse and her crew had modified an airoplane to fly out into space to find mar-vel's lab. When they arrived they say what they needed, the tesseract.They had realized they werent alone...however they were safe it was more skrill the had been guarding the lab. When the kree came carol gave fury the tesseract "what do i do with it" he said clueless then all of a sudden the cat , sorry i mean flurcan reached out of its mouth with tentacles and grabbbed the tessaract and swalllowed it whole "gross" protested fury. the end

    Isabella.

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